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    Be charity sincerity

    That is a beautiful poem, Lois. The form is fantastic and the picture is great. Also in the Bible a carpet is used as a picture of the Son. You remember the carpet in the temple which was torn apart when Jesus died.

    Have you written the poem yourself?

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    2011-11-02 19:33:16 Posted by Anders ()

    No Anders, I didn't write this poem, but it sure says a lot and is beautifu. I write some poetry, but I'm not a poet. Whish I was. Glad you enjoyed it.


    2011-11-02 22:51:35 Posted by Lois ()


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    Be charity sincerity

    The poem is iambic, it is written so that the line goes like this: "da DUM da DUM da DUM da DUM". And every line is perfect. It takes years do learn to do that. Nice.

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    2011-11-03 07:15:58 Posted by Anders ()

    Thanks Anders for the information concerning the poem...Have a great day.
    2011-11-03 12:25:32 Posted by Loiss ()


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    Be charity sincerity

    I remember you showed some interest in a poem of mine called "The two of you" once, Lois. I have changed it a bit since then. By the way it is also iambic.

    THE TWO OF YOU

    The two of you like to the beach
    a dreaming couple step by each –
    stop for a while and think of it:
    Is sea the motion, land the fit?

    Is land the woman, sea the man,
    to cultivate the earth, the plan?
    If so necessity your goal.
    If so let wisdom free your soul.

    Look up, and feel the wind, the air.
    Look up, and feel the rain, the care.
    Together they will keep up life,
    utility by not in strife.

    The air will let the being blow.
    The rain will let the being grow.
    Together they will life afford.
    Perhaps they are by Christ, The Lord.

    Look even further up and see
    the sun show courtesy and free
    the moon caressing earth at night,
    both entertaining Christ, the light.

    The sun exposes will and fears.
    The moon exposes wants and cares.
    Together and by God they are
    explaining the exotic star.

    Reflect upon it. Feel the truth
    so obvious to some, to youth.
    And as you start to walk again
    let hands unite. By fingers ten.

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    2011-11-03 16:51:48 Posted by Anders ()

    Anders, that is a great poem. have enjoyed it.
    You must be a great poet. I know very little about poetry. I write the simple ones. I had some lessons on all kind of poetry, but never could figure out what they were talking about, so I just stopped trying. Thanks for posting this....
    2011-11-03 17:39:05 Posted by Lois ()

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